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WIP - gimme advice. by Lumaris WIP - gimme advice. by Lumaris
Need help with this.
Since I can do this in between classes - I've dubbed this "test dummy". So hit me with all the advice and critiques you got.

Please include tutorials/articles if you know any good sources.
Please note that I'm currently writing out an "art boot camp" to work on anatomy.
And also, I got this at 700 px wide so anyone who wants to do a paint over or redline it to help me see whatever error you see can do. I'd appreciate it :'D

But.
Only if you want.
If you don't, it's cool. I have ways of attaining critiques outside DA.

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Wow he looks like he is part of a peoples who very much base there armour and clothing on sort of fish and such things you know? Still just amazing =D
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CrimsonnRain Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
His head needs to be a little farther back... The way it is, it looks like he's sticking his neck out. Maybe the helmet a little forward? It looks like it might fall off. That's all I can see D: Sorry I can't help that much
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Lumaris Apr 28, 2011  Student Digital Artist
The S curve (line of action) called for the head to position as that, but I'm looking into it again. I've moved it around, and to be honest, it's hard not to make it look like he's pushing his head ridiculously back xD. I might have gotten it, but even after two days of not looking at this painting, I feel like I'm probably seeing it wrong. Gah. I'm beginning to wonder if this is a lost cause...
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CrimsonnRain Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah well XD I'm not the best person to spot these things anyway. And it's not a lost cause, it's very good. Hmmm I don't know, there's just something off with the head D: It's perfect other than that. Maybe hair line? the helmet? or the shape of the head. That's the only three things I can think of. Mostly I can just say oh, this part looks wrong, but I can't pinpoint anything D: or mabe the absolute white of the skin :\ But, he's supposed to look that way so. Eck.
Anyway, it really is good I love the motion and the concept, even the colors. So, don't give up! It's beautiful, it really is
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CrayonMechanic Apr 26, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Tone down those whites my friend! Work within the mid-tones, use the lights sparingly. His face is beaming like a lightbulb. Get some purples around those eye-lids too, and greens, very subtly, helps break up the colours and make the picture more interesting. Also, the composition is left heavy, crop it or move him to the centre more perhaps.
I'm liking the materials coming off his helm, nice energy in those, the hair too! Really helps bring the piece alive.
Keep it up!
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Lumaris Apr 26, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Alright, so the levels adjustment layer failed xD I'll rid it and fix it up. Thanks for the tips! :la: Does this mean the center line issue is fixed? Or is there something I missed? o__O
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CrayonMechanic Apr 27, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Things look a lot more aligned now my friend! Nice work. :)
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Zaebrael Apr 26, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The arm holding the mask from wrist to elbow looks a little curved and slightly displaced. I like the hand quiet a bit. Curious, is he supposed to look like he's undead? Other than that you've been improving very much over the years.
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Lumaris Apr 28, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Could it be the bracer being too thin that gives that illusion? I'm trying to see what you see and I'm blind to it x__X I've drawn the "bones" over this time and again and it seemed fine - but again, I think I'm just blind to this now. Yeah, he's supposed to look like that. Thanks, but I don't feel like I've improved much this past year :/
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Zaebrael Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You have improved a lot. I may not comment everything but I do look at every piece :D

It could be the bracer throwing me off. The split (?) is wobbly like he bought it from a bad blacksmith or kept using it to beat the crap out of someone one.
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